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stdClass Object ( [nid] => 277903 [vid] => 281496 [type] => task_discussion [status] => 1 [created] => 1274742945 [changed] => 1274742946 [comment] => 0 [promote] => 1 [sticky] => 0 [revision_timestamp] => 1274742946 [title] => Re: Review & Edit - Keframa College Website [body] => I thought I’d suggest a couple more ideas for the homepage! :) Under the ‘Welcome’ portion you have a couple minor errors. First paragraph: “Hardly” should be “hard.” Fourth paragraph: “Poverty stricken” to “poverty-stricken.” Fifth paragraph: A bit of a run on sentence (56 words with no commas or periods). Try something like this: It is against this, that the community is asking for a school run by them in which we can give the remaining youth a chance to a cheaper education. This is a way of fighting off the looming illiteracy rates and future gangsters who will destabilize the community even more if measures are not taken to solve the problem. Sixth paragraph: “Makinga” to “Making a.” On your sidebar (the Home, About Us, etc.) I noticed you have a few of the tabs color coded and I really like the result. Perhaps do the rest in color codes? And finally I noticed you have a Facebook account, maybe set up a twitter account as well so your supporters can follow you and you can follow those who may be able to help you! Check it out: www.twitter.com and if you do set one up I will definitely be following. [teaser] => I thought I’d suggest a couple more ideas for the homepage! :) Under the ‘Welcome’ portion you have a couple minor errors. First paragraph: “Hardly” should be “hard.” Fourth paragraph: “Poverty stricken” to “poverty-stricken.” Fifth paragraph: A bit of a run on sentence (56 words with no commas or periods). Try something like this: [log] => [format] => 1 [uid] => 42186 [name] => Charlie 1274740347 [picture] => [data] => a:12:{s:8:"options1";s:1:"0";s:2:"op";s:18:"Create new account";s:6:"submit";s:18:"Create new account";s:7:"form_id";s:13:"user_register";s:16:"captcha_solution";b:1;s:13:"captcha_token";s:32:"019b08f3605d23e8288aaf3e3cbc60ba";s:14:"validationdata";a:4:{s:7:"form_id";s:13:"user_register";s:10:"preprocess";b:1;s:6:"module";s:9:"recaptcha";s:4:"type";s:9:"reCAPTCHA";}s:7:"contact";i:0;s:16:"nodecomment_sort";s:1:"1";s:16:"privatemsg_allow";i:1;s:28:"privatemsg_setmessage_notify";i:0;s:17:"messaging_default";s:4:"mail";} [path] => village/barr/project/task/discussion/re-review-edit-keframa-college-website-0 [field_embedded_video] => Array ( [0] => Array ( [embed] => [value] => [provider] => [data] => Array ( ) ) ) [field_external_link] => Array ( [0] => Array ( [url] => [title] => [attributes] => N; ) [1] => Array ( [url] => [title] => [attributes] => N; ) ) [comment_type] => task_discussion [og_groups] => Array ( [0] => 229829 ) [og_groups_both] => Array ( [229829] => Barr ) [og_public] => 1 [tags] => [nodewords] => Array ( ) [trid] => 0 [language] => en [i18n_status] => 0 [taxonomy] => Array ( ) [translation] => Array ( ) [cid] => 277903 [pid] => 0 [hostname] => 71.53.170.117 [thread] => 02/ [mail] => [homepage] => [comment_target_nid] => 277022 [depth] => 0 )

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stdClass Object ( [nid] => 279403 [vid] => 283080 [type] => task_discussion [status] => 1 [created] => 1275951561 [changed] => 1275951561 [comment] => 0 [promote] => 1 [sticky] => 0 [revision_timestamp] => 1275951561 [title] => Re: Review & Edit - Keframa College Website [body] => Hi! Haven't had the chance to look through the whole site in detail but am wondering why you have the 'Our Library' page http://www.websites.designpandorabox.eu/KeframaCollege/our_library.html as this does not appear to have anything to do with the school. It would also be good to have a News page (or a link to a blog) where you can post regular updates on progress. That is a good way to keep supporters up to date with what is happening, while the information on the other pages will probably not change very often once it has been finalised. Mary [teaser] => Hi! Haven't had the chance to look through the whole site in detail but am wondering why you have the 'Our Library' page http://www.websites.designpandorabox.eu/KeframaCollege/our_library.html as this does not appear to have anything to do with the school. It would also be good to have a News page (or a link to a blog) where you can post regular updates on progress. That is a good way to keep supporters up to date with what is happening, while the information on the other pages will probably not change very often once it has been finalised. Mary [log] => [format] => 1 [uid] => 2698 [name] => MaryS [picture] => [data] => a:8:{s:8:"og_email";s:1:"1";s:16:"privatemsg_allow";i:1;s:28:"privatemsg_setmessage_notify";i:1;s:17:"messaging_default";s:4:"mail";s:7:"contact";i:0;s:16:"nodecomment_sort";s:1:"2";s:29:"taxonomy_image_disable_images";i:0;s:8:"options1";s:1:"3";} [path] => village/barr/project/task/discussion/re-review-edit-keframa-college-website-2 [field_embedded_video] => Array ( [0] => Array ( [embed] => [value] => [provider] => [data] => Array ( ) ) ) [field_external_link] => Array ( [0] => Array ( [url] => [title] => [attributes] => N; ) [1] => Array ( [url] => [title] => [attributes] => N; ) ) [comment_type] => task_discussion [og_groups] => Array ( [0] => 229829 ) [og_groups_both] => Array ( [229829] => Barr ) [og_public] => 1 [tags] => [nodewords] => Array ( ) [trid] => 0 [language] => en [i18n_status] => 0 [taxonomy] => Array ( ) [translation] => Array ( ) [cid] => 279403 [pid] => 0 [hostname] => 86.184.7.2 [thread] => 04/ [mail] => [homepage] => [comment_target_nid] => 277022 [depth] => 0 )